When I read the essay about the guy who hated Coldplay, I decided that I would have given him a B on the essay because he only gave one reason why they are horrible, talked circles around it, but defended it well.
When reading the essay, you find out somewhere in the first or second paragraph that the writer does not like the band Coldplay. He states that he doesn't like them because of the range that the songs are written in; they are too high for the lead singer to sing. This is a well constructed argument and he has clearly thought of many defenses to the argument
He goes on to state that they should lower the songs and that would make them a better band. But he it seems he could have said this in a much shorter amount of writing. Maybe it is because I am a very analytical writer; I like to get to the point and just focus on it. The writer uses examples of songs and lyrics to help prove his point, but he seems to also put a lot of extra words into a sentence to just make it more elevated. This isn't effective, because he loses his audience in his flowery wording and misses his chance to captivate them.
All in all, he did a good job defending his one and only point, he just should have got rid of the extra wording and it would have been worth an A!
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yeah, good point, the essay is actually well written, but it is not well supported.
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